Thesis Statement: The rise of artificial intelligence (AI) technology has a profound impact on jobs across various industries, leading to both opportunities and challenges for the workforce.

I have my first draft but I got feedback from my teacher and this is what he said should be fixed! 

1. Your thesis is good, but also one that most people will agree with. If you want a strong argumentative thesis, phrase it in a way that more people will disagree with.
2. Related to point #1, your counter argument doesn’t seem directly related to your thesis. The counter argument should contradict the thesis in an important way. Your thesis is balanced, stating that there are opportunities and challenges. Your counter argument says that jobs will be lost. But this counter argument could simply be a “challenge.” On the other hand, if your thesis argued that AI was a net benefit to the workforce (or economy or etc), then the counter argument would more directly challenge your thesis.
3. It looks like you have good sources listed in the “negative effects” section, but I don’t see any for the “positive effects” or “counter argument” sections. You will want to make sure that your argument is well supported with sources in each section. Related to comments above, if you turn your thesis into an argument for AI benefits (or the reverse) then the sources listed in “negative effects” could be your counter arguments (or they could support your main argument if you decide to argue against AI).

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