Harvard 12th
Total words count: 3750 +/- 10%
This article needs to be revised to address only the issues of high school students in Jiangsu Province: The article mentions college students (including nursing students) many times, which is inconsistent with the research topic. The focus should be on the academic stress and mental health issues of high school students in Jiangsu Province. The research tools (such as college student questionnaires and nursing literature) are not suitable for the target group and need to be revised to tools and literature suitable for middle school students. The epidemic-related content is no longer applicable: The impact of COVID-19 on academic stress is mentioned many times, but we have entered the post-epidemic era. The relevant content needs to be updated or deleted to focus on more relevant and current academic stress factors. The adaptability of the research method: The mixed-methods method itself is reasonable, but the cited tools (such as the college student anxiety questionnaire) may not accurately reflect the stress and mental health of high school students. It is recommended to re-select questionnaire tools suitable for middle school students, such as the Middle School Mental Health Scale (MHT) or the Academic Stress Self-Assessment Scale. The sampling method problem: It mentions stratified sampling of college students by grade, major, etc., but these categories are not suitable for high school students. It is recommended to change to stratified sampling by grade (first, second, third year of high school) and academic performance. Bias in literature citation: There are a lot of citations of research on college students and international samples (such as nursing, medical and other professional students), but there is a lack of research support for Chinese middle school students, especially in Jiangsu Province. It is recommended to consult literature that is closer to the target group, such as research on the sources of stress and coping mechanisms of domestic middle school students. The description of methods and tools is lengthy but not targeted enough: For example, the data analysis section discusses regression analysis, but there is no clear argument for whether this method is necessary and appropriate for high school students’ data. The description of methods can be simplified and specific details on how to target the problems of middle school students in Jiangsu Province can be added. The ethics section is too generalized: The ethics section repeatedly mentions the impact of the epidemic on data collection, but does not specify how to protect the data privacy of middle school students. It is necessary to clarify how to obtain parental consent in the study and the specific measures for psychological support for minors. The conclusion and discussion section is generalized: The conclusion focuses on the coping strategies of college students, which is inconsistent with the actual situation of high school students. Format and expression issues: There are problems with unclear paragraph logic and repeated sentences, such as repeating the advantages of mixed research methods when describing them. The content needs to be organized more clearly so that the article revolves around the academic pressure of high school students in Jiangsu Province.