I need to revise my old paper by rewrting it as i am slightly changing the topic; I have posted the directions; comments from proffesor on the old paper:Remember to craft a persuasive argument. There is a bit too much summary here. Like we discussed, ground this in something that you can analyze. Review the Chicago citation style guide. Weave the course readings throughout the paper. Avoid broad generalizations. Provide evidence for your claims. more instructions:Resubmitting the same draft will result in a zero. You must revise your paper to receive credit for this assignment. Review the term paper directions and make sure that you have fulfilled the assignment.
On the first page of your revised paper, write a note to Dr. Wolff detailing the changes that you made to your paper.
- Explain which of the comments from your peers you implemented and how.
- If you did not make a change that someone suggested, explain your reasoning.
- If you received feedback from Dr. Wolff, then detail what changes you made and how.
- If you did not make a change that Dr. Wolff suggested, explain your reasoning.
[ i want to change the title to be “embracing diversity and inclusivity in the beauty industry(particularly in makeup and haircare) so that it can be a topic you can analyze; it should be an argumentative essay and can me in an I-perspective] make the introduction interesting by making up my experiences relating it to the topic and provide statistics]
additional info; we watched a documentary called found and its basically about some girls who got adopted from china and their experiences, you can relate this to the paper by saying how there are different beauty standards…..