i already worked on it but i got some feedbacks and I need to my document to get fix , this are the feedbacks :
You’re doing a good job providing an overview and summary of others’ arguments, but work on emphasizing your own argument. Use sources to support your argument and interpretation as opposed to simply summarizing others’ arguments. Think of each body paragraph as a mini essay that starts with a specific argument of yours that you’ll support with evidence, reasons, and analysis in your paragraph.
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To improve the focus and argument of your paper do the following:
1. Identify the topic of the paragraph
2. Identify the aim of the paragraph: what are you trying to achieve/prove with the paragraph
3. what is your argument? An argument should not be a fact. It should be something someone can and would argue against
4. Does your paragraph have evidence and sources that you explain as reasons to support your argument for that paragraph?
In an argumentative paper, as you support the individual argument for each paragraph, you gradually make your case for the overall thesis.