Use the attached guide.
The investigation portion of the essay has already been written, however, please revise the following feedback:
1. You may want to consider the wording of your question to make it more specific to your paper.
1. You may want to consider the wording of your question to make it more specific to your paper.
2. You may want to consider more analysis in regards to OPVL (origin purpose value limitations). You may want to consider breaking up ideas with smaller paragraphs (see attached History IA directions)
3. You have a number of generalities. You may want to consider validating those with specific evidence.
4. You may want to consider looking at your paper and be sure what you are writing validates your thesis. Your evidence has to prove this. Why is all of this important to know?
5. You may want to consider not being as vague throughout your paper.
6. You may want to consider revisiting your Reflection. Please see IA style guide that was posted. How do you handle Bias…etc
7. Lastly, you may want to consider re-working the paper so your evidence and question align. In the end, you have to prove your point. Moreover, you have to specifically write how and what you are writing actually proves your point.